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RabbitSnore's Self-Immolation and Humiliation Poetry Thread

"Chuck can you stop hammering my ass" and other fine literary accomplishments.

Postby theHappyFungus on Fri Mar 21, 2008 12:39 am

RabbitSnore wrote:
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RabbitSnore wrote:A short one in my usual spurt-like style.

“Four Diamonds and a Heart”

Dealt a six high –
yeah, I know it sucks –
but there’s no sense not going all in
when you’re playing just one hand.







And one with sexual imagery for you perverts.

“Tongue”

I’m never happy just reading words –
I need to feel them,
rubbing on my skin like hands beneath my clothes,
calloused and silken,
icy and freshly baked.
When I feel those words,
those bottle neck and candy cane fingers,
I am naked and unashamed,
I am drunken and euphoric
as though at a Bacchanal,
as though in a dazed orgy –
briny sweat and sweet saliva on my tongue –
words.







This stuff was all published in a small journal, and it's probably the reason for what I was talking about on the "Women" thread.

learn french and you will be set for life.


German ain't good enough, eh?

german is fun, but french is sexier.
just a bitch to learn though.
trust me, ive tried.
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Postby RabbitSnore on Fri Mar 21, 2008 12:43 am

French sounds sexy, I'll agree.

I think English can be sexy with the right words however.

Let's see if I can find something to demonstrate with....
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Postby theHappyFungus on Fri Mar 21, 2008 12:51 am

RabbitSnore wrote:French sounds sexy, I'll agree.

I think English can be sexy with the right words however.

Let's see if I can find something to demonstrate with....

every language can be sexy if you've never heard it. except screaming Chinese.
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Postby RabbitSnore on Fri Mar 21, 2008 12:54 am

theHappyFungus wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:French sounds sexy, I'll agree.

I think English can be sexy with the right words however.

Let's see if I can find something to demonstrate with....

every language can be sexy if you've never heard it. except screaming Chinese.


I'm talking about just getting someone's juices flowing with words, even if you're familiar with the words.

I can't find something that on my hard drive to demonstrate.

Maybe I'll write something on the fly.
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Postby theHappyFungus on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:01 am

RabbitSnore wrote:
theHappyFungus wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:French sounds sexy, I'll agree.

I think English can be sexy with the right words however.

Let's see if I can find something to demonstrate with....

every language can be sexy if you've never heard it. except screaming Chinese.


I'm talking about just getting someone's juices flowing with words, even if you're familiar with the words.

I can't find something that on my hard drive to demonstrate.

Maybe I'll write something on the fly.

hmmm?
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Postby RabbitSnore on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:06 am

My muse is taking the evening off, it seems.

I can't think of anything....

Damn it.
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Postby Thereisnospoon on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:07 am

RabbitSnore wrote:My muse is taking the evening off, it seems.

I can't think of anything....

Damn it.


Just be lazy and post a link to the Zion rave scene.
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Postby RabbitSnore on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:09 am

Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:My muse is taking the evening off, it seems.

I can't think of anything....

Damn it.


Just be lazy and post a link to the Zion rave scene.


It would be sexier to post a link to the a scene from Attack of the Clones.
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Postby Thereisnospoon on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:10 am

RabbitSnore wrote:
Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:My muse is taking the evening off, it seems.

I can't think of anything....

Damn it.


Just be lazy and post a link to the Zion rave scene.


It would be sexier to post a link to the a scene from Attack of the Clones.


Nothing says world class poetry like "I THOUGHT WE AGREED NOT TO FALL IN LOVE."
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Postby RabbitSnore on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:15 am

Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:
Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:My muse is taking the evening off, it seems.

I can't think of anything....

Damn it.


Just be lazy and post a link to the Zion rave scene.


It would be sexier to post a link to the a scene from Attack of the Clones.


Nothing says world class poetry like "I THOUGHT WE AGREED NOT TO FALL IN LOVE."


[youtube]http://youtube.com/watch?v=TLcW3FBMPTw[/youtube]

YOU FUCKING ASKED FOR IT.
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Postby theHappyFungus on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:18 am

RabbitSnore wrote:
Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:
Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:My muse is taking the evening off, it seems.

I can't think of anything....

Damn it.


Just be lazy and post a link to the Zion rave scene.


It would be sexier to post a link to the a scene from Attack of the Clones.


Nothing says world class poetry like "I THOUGHT WE AGREED NOT TO FALL IN LOVE."


[youtube]http://youtube.com/watch?v=TLcW3FBMPTw[/youtube]

YOU FUCKING ASKED FOR IT.

now i remember wh i hated attack of the clones.
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Postby RabbitSnore on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:20 am

theHappyFungus wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:
Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:
Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:My muse is taking the evening off, it seems.

I can't think of anything....

Damn it.


Just be lazy and post a link to the Zion rave scene.


It would be sexier to post a link to the a scene from Attack of the Clones.


Nothing says world class poetry like "I THOUGHT WE AGREED NOT TO FALL IN LOVE."


[youtube]http://youtube.com/watch?v=TLcW3FBMPTw[/youtube]

YOU FUCKING ASKED FOR IT.

now i remember wh i hated attack of the clones.


I CALL IT AGGRESSIVE NEGOTIATIONS.
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Postby Thereisnospoon on Fri Mar 21, 2008 1:24 am

RabbitSnore wrote:
Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:
Thereisnospoon wrote:
RabbitSnore wrote:My muse is taking the evening off, it seems.

I can't think of anything....

Damn it.


Just be lazy and post a link to the Zion rave scene.


It would be sexier to post a link to the a scene from Attack of the Clones.


Nothing says world class poetry like "I THOUGHT WE AGREED NOT TO FALL IN LOVE."


[youtube]http://youtube.com/watch?v=TLcW3FBMPTw[/youtube]

YOU FUCKING ASKED FOR IT.


Best scene since the ending of Casablanca.
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Postby RetroJape on Fri Mar 21, 2008 8:16 pm

Man, I'm a sucker for poetry, though I don't claim to be good at all, because I don't think I am.

Anyway, I enjoyed the read. My favorite would probably have to be your first. The imagery worked, and I also enjoyed the surrealism. It's a guilty pleasure I guess, but it's something I've always liked. Even my dreams always have that certain surreal aspect, and your poem almost did feel like a dream, to me at least. Hope you post some more, I'm glad to know that I'm not alone in enjoying all of this writing. It's funny...I only just noticed this board, heh.

EDIT: Well, your other posts already convinced me that you liked writing, Rabbit, I guess I just didn't...mention that...or something.
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Postby TurkeyBeef on Fri Mar 21, 2008 9:12 pm

Those were good poems. I'm only good at making couplets.
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